JaseyBoi Posted May 12, 2005 Report Share Posted May 12, 2005 Back by popular demmand "I WON'T LIE"Why all the stories , Why all the liesI can see them coming through your eyesIts no surprise its just no supriiiiiiiiiseAll those stories all those liesAll those stories all those liesAll those stories all those liesI can see them coming through your eyesWhy all the stories, why all the liesIs this just you, Is this what you doTell your stories tell your liesI can see them coming through your eyesI can see them coming through your eyesAll your storys all your liesIts no surprise Its no surpriseIt doesnt have to be this wayIt doesnt have to stay this wayIll tell you why and I wont lieIll tell you why and I wont lieIm not here to tell you all the meaning of your lifeBut just dont lie its jusy not youIf u lie then its trueYour not the one for meSo let it beAnd let it goIm gone all readyIm afraid so. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jimr Posted May 12, 2005 Report Share Posted May 12, 2005 So what you're trying to get across is...you wont lie? What if a man, lay on his deathbed, having jumped infront of a car to knock his love to safety, grabbed your arm and asked if his wife was alright? Could you tell him that he had infact inadvertently pushed her into the path of a oncoming bus, in effect sacraficing himself for nothing? I think not. Lieing is great. Stop hating on the lieing. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen B Posted May 13, 2005 Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 "Amature" spelling? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HummerOfIntenseEvil Posted May 13, 2005 Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 You can see their lies coming through their eyes?Don't you mean mouth? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JaseyBoi Posted May 13, 2005 Author Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 Em u can tell wen someones lying by there mouth m8?, GOODLUCK with that aneUsually people can tell other people are lying by there eyes no?and tbh i never said i was good at writing songs,And was kinda hoping for some serious comments not the odd babble of kite Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HummerOfIntenseEvil Posted May 13, 2005 Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 Em u can tell wen someones lying by there mouth m8?' date=' GOODLUCK with that aneUsually people can tell other people are lying by there eyes no?and tbh i never said i was good at writing songs,And was kinda hoping for some serious comments not the odd babble of kite [/quote']Well when I tell a lie, the soundwaves that the lie in question is carried on TEND to come out of my mouth. I'd have a pretty hard job trying to emit lies through my eyes, since eyes are purely receivers.And there is, of course, that old gag: "I can tell when you're lying - your lips move."What I'm basically trying to say is give up, cos the last thing the world needs is more "emo"esque lyrics. Especially such badly spelt ones. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest tv tanned Posted May 13, 2005 Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 Hi guys/galsim kinda new around here but not new to abdn lol and ive been writing crap songs for a few years now..But ah m8 told me about here so i decided to post 1 song that took me 5 mins to write there nae great and im not expecting any musik awards for em its just ma m8 "BUX" thinks some of ma songs r nae bad and said i should post on here.... so here goes......"I WON'T LIE"Why all the stories ' date=' Why all the liesI can see them coming threw your eyesIts no surprise its just no supriiiiiiiiiseAll those stories all those liesAll those stories all those liesAll those stories all those liesI can see them coming threw your eyesWhy all the stories, why all the liesIs this just you, Is this what you doTell your stories tell your liesI can see them coming threw your eyesI can see them coming threw your eyesAll your storys all your liesIts no surprise Its no surpriseIt doesnt have to be this wayIt doesnt have to stay this wayIll tell you why and I wont lieIll tell you why and I wont lieIm not here to tell you all the meaning of your lifeBut just dont lie its jusy not youIf u lie then its trueYour not the one for meSo let it beAnd let it goIm gone all readyIm afraid so./edited about 5 mins after original postGood start i think ive posted this in the wrong bloody section can it be moved or shall i delete and start again [/quote']Threw, example, he threw the frisbee for his dog to chaseThrough, example, he walked through the open door.Unless the lies threw their eyes somewhere? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest tv tanned Posted May 13, 2005 Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 pls m8 no 1 can understand wot the fck ur saying!!!!!!! Speak like a normal person you ass hole' date=' get some original material, and when you do that maybe you should think about going to school to learn how to spell and pronounce words correctly. PRAT[/quote']A little harsh non? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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Benji Posted May 13, 2005 Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 www.storymania.com was the link?? Anyways good effort JME -- To be fair that's shit from you, despite what is written. Not a bad effort and maybe this site should accomodate the writers? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brianm Posted May 13, 2005 Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 maybe a wee bit harsh alright. Whats the point of putting down words on a page though? a song isnt a song without music...its a poem. i'm sure there are plenty of 'poets corners' littering the net which may be more receptive than here. i rarely listen to lyrics. i mean i might snatch a word here and there, but mainly tis just mumbling along while listening to the melody, or that cool solo or whatever. How many bands write really good lyrics? not too many...metallica's are a bit shite, but the overall package is awesome-usually. u'd be better off writing the melody that goes with it, recording it, and then posting that to see what people think, or how you can improve etc. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JaseyBoi Posted May 13, 2005 Author Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 Well when I tell a lie' date=' the soundwaves that the lie in question is carried on TEND to come out of my mouth. I'd have a pretty hard job trying to emit lies through my eyes, since eyes are purely receivers.And there is, of course, that old gag: "I can tell when you're lying - your lips move."What I'm basically trying to say is give up, cos the last thing the world needs is more "emo"esque lyrics. Especially such badly spelt ones.[/quote']When you lie m8 the soundwaves ideed come out your mouth but the lies come out in your eyes......."i can tell your lying" havent u ever heard that b4?..... you think thats means i can tell your lying besuase it came out your mouth?........"Usually your eyes say a lot more than your mouth" have you also never heard this saying?....AM i the retarded one here tbh?......Tbh guys i didnt come here for a writing competition or good praise. came here for some mature replies and ok my spelling is god damn awful but who spells a song wen there singing it ........Its about emotion not grammar imo...... lol Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rachie Posted May 13, 2005 Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 (Meaningless opinion)I quite liked it, I've definitely seen worse. You didn't deserve some of the replies in this thread that's for sure, don't take it down cause of one immature prat who thinks he knows all about spelling and grammar.Some people don't listen to the lyrics, they listen to the music more, others are the opposite, and some people are in the middle. I think I'm in the middle there, I like a song with good lyrics, so to see new stuff posted is always interesting Keep it up, can only get better with practice right? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calum Posted May 13, 2005 Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 It could definitely be catchy. I'll give it that.There are much worse lyricists being idolised as we speak, so keep going. I'm sure that with a bit of work you could bring it up to a reasonable standard. You said you wrote it in five minutes, just spend a bit more time perfecting it.Anyone with half a brain knows what you mean by lying through the eyes. In fact, everyone knows what you mean; some just like to be pedantic and irritating.Any spelling and grammar points anyone wants to point out to me? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JaseyBoi Posted May 13, 2005 Author Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 It's opinions i wanted cheef just not insults and being called a prat Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frosty Jack Posted May 13, 2005 Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 Well when I tell a lie' date=' the soundwaves that the lie in question is carried on TEND to come out of my mouth. I'd have a pretty hard job trying to emit lies through my eyes, since eyes are purely receivers.[/quote'] Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cloud Posted May 13, 2005 Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 Any spelling and grammar points anyone wants to point out to me?Yes."You have caused me so mu..." *stops self*kidding Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HummerOfIntenseEvil Posted May 13, 2005 Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 I think Mr Taking The Piss would be more apt. If there is such a comic strip. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
calum Posted May 13, 2005 Report Share Posted May 13, 2005 Yes."You have caused me so mu..." *stops self*kidding I was half way out the door with the butcher knife there We ALL know after my constant banging on about it that that isn't my bad grammar. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Birdman Posted May 15, 2005 Report Share Posted May 15, 2005 Back by popular demmand "I WON'T LIE"Why all the stories ' date=' Why all the liesI can see them coming through your eyesIts no surprise its just no supriiiiiiiiiseAll those stories all those liesAll those stories all those liesAll those stories all those liesI can see them coming through your eyesWhy all the stories, why all the liesIs this just you, Is this what you doTell your stories tell your liesI can see them coming through your eyesI can see them coming through your eyesAll your storys all your liesIts no surprise Its no surpriseIt doesnt have to be this wayIt doesnt have to stay this wayIll tell you why and I wont lieIll tell you why and I wont lieIm not here to tell you all the meaning of your lifeBut just dont lie its jusy not youIf u lie then its trueYour not the one for meSo let it beAnd let it goIm gone all readyIm afraid so.[/quote']Do yourself a favour....Never Ever go into writing unless you're going to adopt a more literate stance. You use "u" as a word and have about 12 i's in Surprise. You spell amateur horrible wrong and give people the impression (well me anyway), that you're talking about "A Mature".If you want to be taken seriously I suggest you try harder. You need to do this for weeks and weeks and weeks and months and months and years and years and then, then you'll be ready.(Not Birdman) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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