Personally when I read this it made me laugh and I thought wow, your essay is excellent. Doesn't matter if it is a bit childish, it will be one hell of a lot better than the rest of the lame attempts in the class. My essays were embarrisingly awful but I still managed to get a B at higher- haha. Can I ask what teacher it was at RGC? HOWEVER, I was less impressed when I showed this to a friend and they told me that this was a copy off a website jokes site that he had read. Why I fired my secretary [rec.humor.funny] poor effort, no wonder the teacher said that to you, it even has the same title.