marc_bass Posted November 10, 2015 Report Share Posted November 10, 2015 Hi all I went to the Lemon Tree on bonfire night to see Pronto Mama supported by Alphas and The Harmonica Movement. See link to my review below. http://57north.org/news/review-pronto-mama-harmonica-movement-alphas Constructive feedback appreciated. RgdsMarc 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adam Easy Wishes Posted November 11, 2015 Report Share Posted November 11, 2015 Nae bad. Constructive feedback: 1. "A capella" is two words. 2. The formatting is a bit off in the second last paragraph - the font increases in size midway through. 3. I don't understand your comparison to fireworks in the final paragraph. I understand why it's there, but I don't understand how it in any way relates to the performance you saw. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TR!ΔNGL€ T€€TH Posted November 11, 2015 Report Share Posted November 11, 2015 Solid stuff, I hope more reviews are to follow. I personally would like a little bit more depth to the review, but that is nit picking. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
marc_bass Posted November 11, 2015 Author Report Share Posted November 11, 2015 Cheers for the feedback Adam Easy Wishes - fair points all. I was maybe trying to be a bit too clever at the end. Doctor Acula - thats what I thought about it as well if Im honest. But it was an entertaining enough evening so I hope that came across clear enough. I will be at the Racing Glacier, Uniform gig at Drummonds on the 25th, looking forward to that. Marc Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adam Easy Wishes Posted November 11, 2015 Report Share Posted November 11, 2015 I should say I wasn't trying to be harsh and agree that there's a massive review-shaped hole in Aberdeen. Hopefully you'll be able to fill it! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TR!ΔNGL€ T€€TH Posted November 11, 2015 Report Share Posted November 11, 2015 I should say I wasn't trying to be harsh and agree that there's a massive review-shaped hole in Aberdeen. Hopefully you'll be able to fill it!I vote for marc_bass to fill the review hole. Fill the hole!Fill the hole!!FILL THE HOLEFILL THE HOLE Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
waltz Posted November 11, 2015 Report Share Posted November 11, 2015 Your paragraphs need to be longer and the extended metaphor about fireworks was kinda laboured but otherwise I got a decent feel for what the gig was like. The advice I've been given about live reviews is to make them less static - don't say things like "this band came on" "this band came on", review it like you would a play or film in three parts. Good, though Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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