Guest Gladstone Posted August 6, 2010 Report Share Posted August 6, 2010 I just wrote a poem. First time ever. I've written hunners of lyrics but this is a different beast for me. Lyrics I write are specifically aimed at being in a song and sounding cool, or fitting in or whatever.I'm not going to lie - this was heavily inspired by Scroobius Pip who I am a little bit obsessed with at the moment...Would appreciate some honest thoughts...The Lowest Common DenominatorEveryone keeps waxing lyrical about these skinny modelsThey're apparently to blame for the nation's eating disordersSome would have us believe that being overweightIs a healthier way of life and obesity is greatHow many times have you heard "big is beautiful"?More like "big is heart attack inducing"I'm sick and tired of the next big health scareBefore it's even happend I'm telling you I won't care.Mad cow disease, bird flu, swine flu, old newsHyped up media vultures who need something better to doHow many times have you seen the word "CRISIS" In big bold lettersWhen the words "minor situation" would have served better?The media is the lowest common denominatorNo longer news reporter, more story creatorThe media is the lowest common denominatorHe'd sell on his mother, the little fucking traitorRuining lives as a hobby and a chosen careerSensationalising the smallest little thing to promote a state of fearBread and butter to these blood sucking vampiresFalsehood after falsehood, sit back and see what transpiresHow many times has a blatant lie destroyed an innocent man?Job, family, friends all gone because of a fucking media scam.The media is the lowest common denominatorNo longer news reporter, more story creator. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Gladstone Posted August 7, 2010 Report Share Posted August 7, 2010 Cheers! Seriously.I always think anything I write and then share is passable (otherwise I wouldn't share it), but for someone to say it is "fucking brilliant" is ace. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MC Nice Andrew Posted August 7, 2010 Report Share Posted August 7, 2010 Sorry, didn't like it; adopting rhyming schemes and beat patterns for a few lines then forgetting about them broke of the flow and left it feeling a little clunky. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Gladstone Posted August 7, 2010 Report Share Posted August 7, 2010 Sorry, didn't like it; adopting rhyming schemes and beat patterns for a few lines then forgetting about them broke of the flow and left it feeling a little clunky.Fair enough, I didn't even try to adopt any rhyming schemes or beat patterns. Just wrote some thoughts down that I thought worked.I know balls all about poetry!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Oedo 808 Posted August 7, 2010 Report Share Posted August 7, 2010 I agree with some of your points about the media and maybe it's a good topic for a poem but I feel that after reading this poem that it's probably not. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Old Gold Posted August 7, 2010 Report Share Posted August 7, 2010 Bar the sweary words, it reads like a Fresh Prince rap. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ca_gere Posted August 7, 2010 Report Share Posted August 7, 2010 I think it's pretty good. Although, 'media' is a bit of a vague buzz word. You could've maybe chosen something more specific to direct the hate towards but content-wise it's great.Individually, the rhyming couplets I think are ace but together it doesn't quite read like a poem. i.e. as a reader you're struggling to find the meter/rhythm. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
berni907 Posted August 15, 2010 Report Share Posted August 15, 2010 Fucking love it dude. So, there's no "proper" rhythm, but that isn't important, that's something you could work on if you went back to it. Really like the points you made, it was a complete no-bullshit rant at the media in general, and 99.9% of the time, the fuckers deserve a good telling off. Well done. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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