nataliecnd Posted February 2, 2004 Report Share Posted February 2, 2004 I thought to myself - this is a review place. And I've wrote a poem lately of which I couldn't find anyone to review. And then I thought of my homies here. I thought you could maybe check it out, hate it or love I really coudn't care. Just wanted to see what a loser I am. Nat xxxO how wondrous those gleaming eyes are, That lingers tastefully throughout despair, The green gone and the red of lust replaced, And a moonlit spider crawls to its web, A gentle flash of solitude upon the nightly air, O how enchanting those blessed lips are, To not but steal a kiss, Moments gone deny thy fate, A vow of blue and black, But surely thoust vouch my temptation? The splendid thought that one did miss, O how vulgar thou dost beauty own, A twisted tale of sorrow, That scorns the intrepid and loves thou worship, May it be the eye of sin, my everlasting fate? The day dawns and the night falls harsh on those who follow, O how cruel is ones passion? Is it tied to every arrow cupid shoots? My fire hast therefore weakened and the embers only burn, To hate love and hope and misery that yield I, Not that I fall to love you, But hate thoust from the roots. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kai Posted February 3, 2004 Report Share Posted February 3, 2004 Sounds Shakespearean (is that a word?). I'm no poetry critic but I enjoyed reading it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Biz Posted February 5, 2004 Report Share Posted February 5, 2004 Aye erm,I'll hae a go tae,THERE WAS A YOUNG GIRL FROM NANTUCKETwho got her head stuck it a bucket Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nataliecnd Posted February 5, 2004 Author Report Share Posted February 5, 2004 Biz urs rocked!! and yeah..it is shakespearean, (if that is a word ?( ) i wrote it after readin Othello... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bryn Posted February 6, 2004 Report Share Posted February 6, 2004 Look, get off your high horse.... Only jokin not bad - much better than anythin I could do Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dolf Posted February 8, 2004 Report Share Posted February 8, 2004 othello is nasty,didnt make it to the end of the book.but yeah the poem is pretty good.it could be used for a higher english poem for people to analyse or somethin. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nataliecnd Posted February 8, 2004 Author Report Share Posted February 8, 2004 bryn lol, othello does suck! i've got an essay to hand in on it 2moz...grrnat xxx Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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